Families often go on many trips together whether it is during the summer, school year or school vacations. One of the places you hear of families going the most is Disney World in Florida or Disney Land in California. Each year, millions of people go to Disney on vacations to experience the fun rides, the entertainment, and the magical aspects that are throughout the parks and hotels. Even with the weakening economy, people are still going to Disney on family vacations or with friends to experience the magic that is created there.With the weakening economy today, many people are on a tighter budget and don’t want to throw away money on expensive vacations. Disney can be very expensive with the hotels, park admissions, and other luxuries, but there are ways to keep this trip on a low budget. There are many package deals for families who visit Disney which can reduce the costs. This helps small or large families to save some money. People can also stay at the more inexpensive hotels instead of spending lots of money to stay in the top notch hotels. This makes people’s stay at Disney more affordable for them while they still can have fun.
When families go to Disney, there is something to do for every age group. This makes the park the perfect place to bring a child of any age and for adults as well. There are the thriller rides, scary ride, tame rides, and many other things to do. One of my personal favorites of a Disney ride when I was in first grade was the Peter Pan’s Flight ride. I would highly recommend this ride to any person, especially younger children, as they soar in a boat through the story of Peter Pan. Some rides little children will enjoy include the Mad Tea Party, Dumbo the Flying Elephant, The Mad Adventures of Winnie the Pooh, and many other rides. For the people who like the thriller rides, there are numerous roller coasters and other fun rides that will leave your stomach in knots. These rides include Space Mountain, Big Thunder Mountain Railroad, and so many more. There is also the infamous tower of terror that drops you from the top floor of a building to the bottom floor. Besides rides in Disney, there are also many attractions that you can go see like Mickey’s house or Minnie’s house. The constant activity and having something to do for everyone keeps families coming to Disney.
Another wonderful aspect of Disney that makes every little child’s dream come true is meeting all of the characters from movies and stories. Every little girl dreams of meeting all of the princesses and this dream becomes reality when they get to meet Cinderella or the Little Mermaid. Besides the princesses, there is Mickey, Minnie Mouse, Pluto, Goofy, and many more characters that people can meet throughout the park. As people run into pirates, princesses, and other characters, they can get their picture taken with them, get their autographs, or even just greet them. Families can even schedule to have meals with the characters that they choose. This is very exciting for little children, but it can also be exciting for teenagers and adults.
There are also daily parades that take place in Disney that happen throughout the parks. Disney usually has different parades at different times and they change these parades depending upon the season. In these parades, people are able to see many characters from different stories depending upon which parade they see. Whatever parade people go to see though, people will almost always get to see Mickey, Minnie Mouse, and the rest of their gang in the parade. Everyone that attends the parade will be amazed with the colorful and detailed floats, the dancing characters, and the magic that is created. Sometimes, people's families are even picked to participate in the parade whether it is dancing with the characters or riding on a float.
Disney is an incredible family vacation that many people choose to take. Many people take this vacation to this popular theme park because of the magic and fun they experience. They are amazed by the great rides, characters, parades, and all of the surprises that are around every corner of Disney. This vacation also does not need to cost a lot of money, which allows families to take this trip. Disney World and Disney Land are remarkable vacation spots for the family.
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I loved you blog KATIE! It had a lot of personality and it seemed like you were excited to be writing about Disney which is rally good. It had a lot of description and it made me want to go to Disney. I really enjoyed readin your blog and I can't wait to see what you write about next :)
ReplyDeleteKatie- your essay overall was very well written and very informative. For example, you have good paragraph structure/format and many concrete details to support your commentary.
ReplyDeleteTwo things to improve on would be the awkwardness in one sentence and a simple capitalization mistake. You said "One of my personal favorites of a Disney ride when I was in first grade was the Peter Pan’s Flight ride". Perhaps you could re-write it as "One of my favorite Disney rides when I was a kid was the Peter Pan's Flight ride".
Overall, your essay was very well written. Good job!
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ReplyDeleteKatie, I really enjoyed reading your blog. There are a few simple errors that need correcting" "there are the thriller rides, scary ride" You might want to make scary ride plural, but besides that this is a good sentence! "Everyone that attends the parade will be amazed with the colorful and detailed floats"-In this sentence, perhaps you should change amazed with, to amazed by. I liked how you listed all the different rides and activities that one can participate in while at disney.
ReplyDelete"whether it is during the summer, school year or school vacations." It should be summer, school year, or summer vacations. The second sentence is a little awkward and could use rewording. I really enjoyed reading this blog and wish to go to Disney World now. You show your personality and voice while providing a discriptive aspect to the blog. Good job.
ReplyDeleteKatie, I have never been to disney world but from your blog I can tell that its such a fun place to go. I would watch out for being to repetative. It seemed to me as I was reading it that you continued to repeat that you can see characters from all different movies and experiences all different rides. I know thats a big part of Diney, but try to use different words when describing all the attractions. Great idea though!!!
ReplyDeleteThis is awkward: "One of the places you hear of families going the most is Disney World in Florida or Disney Land in California."
ReplyDeleteDo you need the word "though" here? "Whatever parade people go to see though, people will almost always get to see Mickey, Minnie Mouse, and the rest of their gang in the parade."
Watch your agreement here: "Besides the princesses, there is Mickey, Minnie Mouse, Pluto, Goofy, and many more characters that people can meet throughout the park."
In general, you need to write with a bit more voice, style, and personality. For a blog entry, this is a very formal piece. It's also one-sided. What about the long lines and the screaming children? Don't be afraid to criticize!
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ReplyDeleteIm planning to go to Tokyo or Hong Kong Disney this Christmas. Hoho and I found some stuffs from Hong Kong Disneyland here as well:
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I will definitely take tones of photos there!!!